Travels_佳作欣赏
today i met joy, my friends and i went to the lianhua mountain park.
at first, we bought a big loaf of bread and we ate it on the lawn. the bread was delicious. then we went hiking. on the way to the top of mountain, we saw a lot of trees and some beautiful flowers. they were colorful. i saw a sign. it says "grass and flowers also have live, no picking!" mary asked to me “can you see that? don’t pick flowers! ” “ok, i see.” we climbed the mountain for a long time, but we still didn’t get to the top. we were tired. then john said: “oh, no. i am very tired. i don’t want to climb this mountain. i don’t like it.”
suddenly, i saw a lake. it was very beautiful. i said aloud, “why don’t we go there? there is a lake!” then we went to the lake. the lake was very clear.
we caught some tadpoles and a shrimp. those tadpoles were very cute. i interviewed some people. first, i met a fat man. i asked him: “good afternoon! sir, what do you think of the lianhua mountain park?” the man smiled and said “i hope that the lianhua mountain will become a dwarf. then i will be happy.” “thank you.” i said.
then i interviewed a child. i asked her “do you like lianhua mountain?” “yes, very much”, “why?”, “because i love flowers and i think climbing mountain can help us to keep fit.” she said.
at last, we went home. today was very happy. this is my travel experience.
pay more little attention to grammer. try to use more transitional words to link the sentences and more adjective words.keep writing.
at first, we bought a big loaf of bread and we ate it on the lawn. the bread was delicious. then we went hiking. on the way to the top of mountain, we saw a lot of trees and some beautiful flowers. they were colorful. i saw a sign. it says "grass and flowers also have live, no picking!" mary asked to me “can you see that? don’t pick flowers! ” “ok, i see.” we climbed the mountain for a long time, but we still didn’t get to the top. we were tired. then john said: “oh, no. i am very tired. i don’t want to climb this mountain. i don’t like it.”
suddenly, i saw a lake. it was very beautiful. i said aloud, “why don’t we go there? there is a lake!” then we went to the lake. the lake was very clear.
we caught some tadpoles and a shrimp. those tadpoles were very cute. i interviewed some people. first, i met a fat man. i asked him: “good afternoon! sir, what do you think of the lianhua mountain park?” the man smiled and said “i hope that the lianhua mountain will become a dwarf. then i will be happy.” “thank you.” i said.
then i interviewed a child. i asked her “do you like lianhua mountain?” “yes, very much”, “why?”, “because i love flowers and i think climbing mountain can help us to keep fit.” she said.
at last, we went home. today was very happy. this is my travel experience.
pay more little attention to grammer. try to use more transitional words to link the sentences and more adjective words.keep writing.