BEC初级作文指导6_BEC初级

    网友三:
    from: office manager
    to: all staff
    date: september 20, 2008
    our company has merged with mason. co recently. the new name " masongolding" will take effect on october 1st. please use the new name in your daily affairs from then on. thanks for your cooperation.
    名师点评:
    开头这句改为分词,following the merger, ....
    改为:routine work 或者其他可以表示日常工作的,affairs 一般是指报纸的一周大事记,或者个人事,比如:love affairs 就是桃色事件,第三者插足。
    网友作文四:
    memo
    from:sonia
    to:all staff
    date:29 september 2008
    re:the changed name of our company
     our company has merged with one of our competiter,the name of our company has changed into masongolding. all the staff should use our new name since 1 october, and we can only use the new name after that day
    you have any question, please connect us.
    thank you!
    名师点评:
    过去分词作定语或状语都是表示已经结束的动作,如果名字已经改完,就不用有这封memo 了。
    改为介词短语after the merger,
    时态错误,完成时表示已经了,应该是将来时。
    去掉,名字问题毋庸置疑,没有商量。
    网友作文五:
    the director board agreed to move toward a merger between our company and mason, the name of company will be changed. the new name masongolding become effective from next month.please be noticed.
    名师点评:
    好罗嗦的原因啊,董事会的决定你就不用提了。
    太长的时间,也太不具体。